This piece is hopefully a start to a longer and very loving poem of honor and remembrance of a town I grew up in
it did not fill much space
although it was a place
filled up the usual
joys and aches
of life that go with
a small town outside
the usual routes
there was the lunch shack
that was up on the curve
just out of town
looking as if it fell off
a truck going too fast
down old 71 and just
landed along the road
a little off center and a little
out of square
with a swinging screen door
and 4 tables
and the best tenderloin
sandwiches south of Kansas City
and a cook with a cough
that left any visitor wondering
what they got besides food
but we never got sick
and we always went back.
there was the drug store
with its 2 aisles of various
remedies and treatments
and a freezer
case of ice cream treats.
the grocery store was on the corner
and featured a double door
and linoleum well worn past
new. If you were a little short
this week, you could leave a charge
on a ticket and stop by later to
get it paid. People paid in
cash or eggs never needing
any plastic card to fulfill their needs.
the bank was at the other end
of the block with its old oak
panels and barred windows
reminiscent of the days
of Bonnie and Clyde although
they never came by near as anyone
knew or could recall.
the old depot sat smack
between a rail siding and
the one railroad line running
through town.
the station master was only
in the office on some days
or whenever there was some
freight being dropped at the siding
most days, the train just passed on
through and it wasn’t many years
until that all ended and
the train came through a couple
times per day and no longer made
any effort to slow down; just
choosing to blow its horn
as a kind of warning to move
out of the way and let
the world pass at a high
rate of speed. it was that
train that crushed the Mossan
boy one day when he just forgot
about it and took his truck
headed home and met 500 tons
of freight going 100 miles an hour.
Dean walked the streets like
a guard watching over his
ward but really he was
just a 7 yr old boy in a
40 yr old body and nobody
minded and what he guarded
looked over him as well.
the old grain elevator stood
like a sentinel along side the
railroad siding marking the
place and anchoring it to
the outside world through its
buying and selling and its way
of providing all the local boys
a rite of passage to manhood as
each successive generation took its
turn on the cob pile forking cobs
to the very end of the pile
the winds blew down the main street
carrying a tumble weed
from time to time and picking
up the dust of the dry summers
too hot for most folk midday
the dust from the elevator making
a fog more dense than any that
San Francisco could dream of
with colorful pools of light made
by the bare bulbs of the driveways
or the headlights of old trucks
bringing whatever crop the ground
had brought forth that season and
ready to be traded in for cash or credit
making another year possible on this
earth.
The men as dirty and sweaty as a human
body came be spending all day in the hot
fog of grain dust pitting their very strength
and lungs against a foe that was unrelenting
and unforegiving.
breathing air that was 1 part oxygen to 4 parts
dirt, they never complained or asked for
help for this is how the work got done and
how the bills got paid and the kids sent off to
college so that they would never have to do
this work but who would also never have
the memory of the cold water being splashed on a face that had changed colors
and the shirts and pants and socks so filthy that
they could not be taken into the house; had to be left in the garage or on the porch after work
leaving them to run to the shower in underwear just as sweat soaked.
on Friday nights the town gathered at the
high school gym and watched the farm boys
play basketball like it had been invented for them; stretching muscles that had worked all week and were ready to spring higher and faster than any of their opponents and so the team was the pride and the joy and the hope fo the whole town. A group of young men carrying the hopes of the whole place to be something more; something beyond the daily grind.
2 Comments
Hey Lonnie,
I don’t know if I’m participating in this workshop the way you intended or not. I probably missed the guidelines somewhere. In any case, here are my thoughts regarding your poem. I think it nicely captures the look and feel of a small town with vivid imagery. I think some places sound really nice as well:
It did not fill much space
Although it was a place
Filled up the usual
Joys and aches
I’m curious to know your thinking behind the line breaks. I am not someone that can describe the complex sounds of poetry beyond simple rhyming patterns. I don’t think you’re going for a simple sound, but I think the poem could be strengthened with more emphasis on its rhythm. I wonder if some of the line breaks partially hinder this flow? After reading chunks where the same thought fragment extends from one line to the next, I almost anticipate a pay off with a particular sound that doesn’t come.
I enjoyed this piece a lot Lonnie! It reminds me of our Archie nose-to-the-grindstone work weekends with tasty tenderloin sandwiches, the dusty elevator elevator, well stocked hardware store, and plentiful local color.